The Garden Birds whistled In a nice, calm and fresh garden. The fresh new air came Into my lungs and refreshed my mind. Leaves fell down to the ground and the natural waterfall splashed Into the mini river. I have been on a holiday for two days now and came across this wonderful garden. People talked In the background as I walked past them towards the mall river. The natural environment was very peaceful I thought in my head .
A man came towards me and had a badge on his shirt that said owner of this garden. “Hi may I help you? ” he asked with a mannered voice. No thank you,” milled at the owner. “This garden was made a year ago,” said the owner. “This is a very peaceful and calm place to relax,” I replied. The owner walked away towards other people as I walked towards another place. As I walked past the rocky path, I noticed writings on some rocks.
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It said “1982- 2002” on it. This was strange. Why would a rock have years on it, I questioned myself with a suspicious look. I kept on walking towards the flower garden. The flowers here were very colorful and bright. As I got closer towards the flowers I came across a broken face on the ground.It looked Like a rock with a face on it.
This got too suspicious every time I got closer to the back. I started to wonder If this place was an old cemetery. The smell of the flowers was very nice. The bees buzzed around the flower garden looking for nectar . The owner walked past with a huge spade and gloves. I quickly caught up to him. “This garden is a very beautiful,” I commented as I reached him.
“l know,” he replied with a hurried look on his face. “Where are you going sir? ” I questioned the owner with a curious look on my face.I’m going to plant more plants at the back,” he replied. I followed him to the back. The owner turned around and said “why are you following me? ” “Can I please see your garden project? ” I asked. “No! ” his loud voice went through my ear. “k,” I replied.
As the man walked towards the back, I quickly sneaked behind the bush and watched where he was going. The owner went in a secret door behind the huge oak tree. I pretended to look around so people wouldn’t know I was following the owner. Birds flew across my face as If It were the owners’ guard.I walked towards the huge oak tree and opened the door. Lots of sunlight shone onto my eyes. I took steps towards the sunlight and saw heaps of tombstones and tugged up coffins.
I thought in my head “is this a cemetery or a garden The owner walked up to me and said “You’re the flirts person to find out about this old cemetery. ” “Oh wow, why did you turn it into a garden? ” “l turned it into a garden because if I buried dead people here, no one would visit this place and I wouldn’t get money to pay for my house bills,” the owner replied with an innocent look on his old wrinkly face.Looks like I’m going to report you to the counselors,” with a serious look on my face. “Please don’t, this is the only way to get money so I can pay my house bills,” the owner begged “l will pay you if u don’t snitch on me to the counselor,” the owner kept on begging. I felt sad inside of me because he wash’s doing this to pay off his bills but he’s was not allowed to remove a commensurately and turn It Into a garden. HIS voice walls so persuasive that. 11th madness me feel bad If I snitched on him.
“Can you please stop begging? ” I questioned the owner. Yes,” with a smile on sack,” “alright” he said with a really big smile in his face. The owner went to get the money so he could pay me back . Overall a very good first attempt at a descriptive backstops. The description was quite well done but would be better if you could go deeper in to the description. Showing the description rather than telling would benefit your writing greatly. Keep in mind tense and wordings to avoid repetition.
Also try work on dialogue to help with characterization. Always have a morale to the story in sight that you can work towards to give your story meaning.